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he diagrams show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010.

he diagrams show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010.
The above diagram illustrates the alteration of
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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 in the
years
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 1990 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that expansion has been undertaken by the museum in the span of twenty
years
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 to accommodate more people.
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, regarding the outdoors of the
museum
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 a cottage situated at the entrance of the compound has been replaced by a cafe from the year 1990 to 2010. In the east, by the year 2010, the car park has been extended by replacing the garden lying in the southeast area close to the entrance to accommodate more people. Gardens in the northern section of the plot
remains
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 unchanged over the
years
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.
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, considering the indoor minor changes had been made over the
years
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. A shop that was occupied in a single room has been expanded by merging the adjacent room.
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 making the store more spacious. The location and size of the storeroom remain unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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