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Many students take part-time jobs while studying in University. Do you think it is a good idea or bad idea?

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It is important to say that a lot of people think that if
the
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students
 have part-time jobs,
this
 can help them to have more discipline,
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develop their organizational capacity and they will be motivated to expand positive habits. Personally, I believe that
students
 should have jobs to acquire professional
experience
 , teamwork and skills in relationships.I feel
this
 way for two main reasons , which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, Pupils when they choose a part-time
job
 it is not only for money because
students
 know they will earn less money but could save some money, and they will have more time to spend on their projects,
families
 and time for them.
On the other hand
 , to get a part-time
job
 they don't need an
experience
 with the
job
 , and pupils can get references for tomorrow's land if they need it and can help to reach the best position in a company. My own
experience
 is a compelling example of
this
. When I was studying for my career I used to work a part-time
job
 on the weekends because I needed more
experience
 to develop my studies.
Secondly
, Some
students
 need part-
job
 to help their
families
 ,especially international
students
 because their
families
 make a huge effort to pay for University most of them come from undeveloped countries and when they immigrate to the country they choose to study, life is usually more expensive.
For instance
,I have some friends who were studying in London , and they never thought how expensive was the city, so they can start to find a
job
 because their
families
 can't afford a room, food and other things. In conclusion, I believe that
students
 should get part-time to develop their skills and motivate their positive minds and integrate into the community if they are
students
 international.
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