The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The following diagram demonstrates the manufacturing of
sugar
from sugar
cane. These are seven stages (growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice, evaporator, centrifuge, drying and cooling). In addition
, this
process has been done by hand and machine.
Firstly
, sugar
can depend on the weather and farmers' methods have been growing between 12 and 18 months. After that, the grown sugar
has been harvested by farmers or machines depending on small-scale or large-scale. The next
step
is crushing and producing juice and then
filtering by purifying. The 5th step
has used an evaporator which needs heating to become syrup. The next
step
is a centrifuge which is separated sugar
from syrup. The last
step
is drying and cooling the sugar
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