Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and the this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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the budget
budget
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budgets
on
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spend
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arts
or they should use it Use synonyms
on
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agree
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governments
should lessen the expenditure on Use synonyms
arts
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idea.
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the area
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government
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more intensively. If the Replace the word
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government
spend more Use synonyms
money
on training teachers, materials that are used in classes and educational facilities, people are able to acquire better education, which causes Use synonyms
bottom
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up
of people’s educational levels. Change preposition
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governments
can support families depending on their income. Some people including single Use synonyms
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struggle with handling their lives because of commitments Fix the agreement mistake
parents
such
as rearing children, working and looking after their parents.
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government
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money
, they Use synonyms
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money
on the Use synonyms
arts
. Use synonyms
Arts
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,
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arts
will disappear.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite