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Money should spend on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree/?

It is claimed that
money
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 should be paid for establishing modern public
buildings
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 like
museums
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 or city halls than reconstructing existing ones. I agree with the idea
about
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of
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 building modern and new
buildings
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 because new
buildings
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 not only
brings
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bring
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 benefit to
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the contry's
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contry's
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country's
 budget but
also
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this
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contry's
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country's
 society too. To start with, Old
buildings
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 keep and show each country's culture, history and past
uniuqe
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unique
 life. But old
buildings
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 can not be robust
for
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apply
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forever.
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, reconstruction or even rebuilding
them
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apply
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is required for the safety of
people
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 from climate
danger
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dangers
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 like
havy
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heavy
 rain or even
from
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apply
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the
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apply
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earthquake.
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, about a
months
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month
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 ago, in
Turkie
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Turkey
 many
people
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 suffered pain, lost their best ones and lost their homes and lost all types of
buildings
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 because of
the a
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the
a
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 high hit of the earthquake.
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, spending
money
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 on rebuilding apartments or any all kinds of
building
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the building
a building
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 is always good to increase new job
vaccancies
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vacancies
comparing
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compared
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 to building
museums
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 or even city halls. Because local
people
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for
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,for
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 example, may visit the museum to take some rest sometime and even tourists too.
However
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,
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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the number
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 of
museums
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 can not guarantee new job places.
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Initially
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,Initially
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 these counties
people
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 need to go to work in different
countries
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 to put
the
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food on the table.
Accortig
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According
 to the fact that, in some
part
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parts
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 of Asia,
people
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 are suffering crisis because of lack of job
vaccancies
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vacancies
as a result
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 of
huge
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a huge
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 number of entertainments. As most
of
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apply
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Asian
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the Asian
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countries
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 are developing
countries
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, by extending
visitors
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visitor
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 attraction, these
countries
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 can not even
increse
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increase
tourists
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tourists'
tourist's
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visit
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visits
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 or even can not make a better life for their society that they deserve. Because of these causes increasing or even
reconstucting
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reconstructing
 old
buildings
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 is a great way to keep the economy stable in
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this
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these
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countries
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. Personally speaking, Paying
money
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 for rebuilding historical
buildings
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 by not changing their
shapesand
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shapes and
apparence
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appearance
 is a very effective way to save
money
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 than spending
money
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 on
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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the number
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 of
museums
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.

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