Money should spend on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree/?

It is claimed that
money
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should be paid for establishing modern public
buildings
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like
museums
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or city halls than reconstructing existing ones. I agree with the idea
about
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building modern and new
buildings
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because new
buildings
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not only
brings
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bring
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benefit to
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the contry's
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contry's
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country's
budget but
also
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this
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contry's
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country's
society too. To start with, Old
buildings
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keep and show each country's culture, history and past
uniuqe
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unique
life. But old
buildings
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can not be robust
for
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forever.
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, reconstruction or even rebuilding
them
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apply
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is required for the safety of
people
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from climate
danger
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dangers
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like
havy
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heavy
rain or even
from
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apply
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the
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earthquake.
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, about a
months
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ago, in
Turkie
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Turkey
many
people
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suffered pain, lost their best ones and lost their homes and lost all types of
buildings
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because of
the a
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the
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high hit of the earthquake.
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, spending
money
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on rebuilding apartments or any all kinds of
building
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the building
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is always good to increase new job
vaccancies
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vacancies
comparing
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to building
museums
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or even city halls. Because local
people
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for
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example, may visit the museum to take some rest sometime and even tourists too.
However
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,
increasing
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number
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the number
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of
museums
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can not guarantee new job places.
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Initially
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these counties
people
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need to go to work in different
countries
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to put
the
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food on the table.
Accortig
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According
to the fact that, in some
part
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parts
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of Asia,
people
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are suffering crisis because of lack of job
vaccancies
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vacancies
as a result
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of
huge
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number of entertainments. As most
of
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Asian
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the Asian
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countries
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are developing
countries
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, by extending
visitors
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attraction, these
countries
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can not even
increse
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increase
tourists
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tourists'
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visit
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or even can not make a better life for their society that they deserve. Because of these causes increasing or even
reconstucting
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reconstructing
old
buildings
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is a great way to keep the economy stable in
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this
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these
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countries
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. Personally speaking, Paying
money
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for rebuilding historical
buildings
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by not changing their
shapesand
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shapes and
apparence
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appearance
is a very effective way to save
money
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than spending
money
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on
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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the number
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of
museums
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.

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