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Some people think that best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Other however believe that there are other alternatives ways of reducing crime. Discuss your opinion?

#people #crime #prison #sentences #alternatives
many people nowadays believe that
knowledge
is belonged
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 to everyone
how
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who
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seek
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 to
ownet
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owner
 and it should be free so that
thay
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they
 will have
an
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easy access to it ,
whereas
 other say it shouldn't be free ,and scientist or students should pay some
money
 to get it.In my opinion, it should not be free ,
although
 it shouldn't be expensive ,so the best solution
knowledge
 should be cheap but not free or expensive.
To Begin
, science
worths
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 the
money
 that we spend on it ,and that
why
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is why
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 I agree with
this
 notion ,and for another reason.
moreover
, if scientific
reaserches
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researchers
researches
 are not funded ,they will no longer
continuoe
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continue
 .
for example
, buying scientific
magazins
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magazines
,books and other
sourses
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sources
 of
knowledge
 will provide the necessary
money
 for the
reserchers
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researchers
 to improve and
continuoe
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continue
 their work.
However
, other people say that information
is belonged
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belongs
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 to
every one
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,and
its
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it's
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 wrong to use it as a way to make
prophits
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profits
prophets
on
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at
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 the
expenses
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expense
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 of other individuals who need
its
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it
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 the most .For
an
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apply
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instant, doctors may need some information to find a treatment
to
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for
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 their patients ,
whereas
 some medical books can get
a
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quite expensive so
that
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which
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 will reduce the quality of work provided by
such
profesional
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professional
professionals
.
to conclude
,
its
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it's
it is
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 true some individuals
requir
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require
a
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fast and free access to
knowledge
 and information since they need it to improve themselves and provide the best
serves
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services
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 given to
coustomers
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customers
,but it is
also
 will cause
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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 if it was free because
scientist
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scientists
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also
need
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mony
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money
 for their
reseches
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researches
 so the best
soloution
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solution
 is making it
payed
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paid
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 but with a few amount of
money
.
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