Writing task 1 General training -The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris parents . In your letter -Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party. -Explain why you won’t be able to attend the party - Give details of plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear Mr and Mrs Mhsawde I hope

this

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letter finds you in

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radiant health and

best

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spirit

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Firstly

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, I would like to thank you for sending the invitation

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Chris’s 25th birthday , it feels like yesterday we were playing in the park as a child and today we are all grown up , I must say time just flies so fast . Since we were kids I remember how Chris used to like

surprise

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parties and

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gifts , the smile and joy on his face

makes

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every arrangement

worth

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. I am sure

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time he will feel

same

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joy and will enjoy the

surprise

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party.

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due to

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my important business meeting on the same day ,

unfortunately

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I am unable to attend the party. I cannot express how sad I am feeling , because I won’t be present there

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Chris ’s birthday celebration but I promise I will compensate

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him . For a long

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I was actually thinking of visiting Australia to meet Chris and

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finally

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I have booked tickets for next month . I will be arriving on 9th January and on 10th of January I will visit your house to

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him . I would really appreciate

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you keep

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plan a secret until I get there. I cannot express

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this

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in words

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how excited I am to see him. Hoping to see you soon. Your lovingly, Parthvi

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Greeting and Closing

Your letter successfully delivers the message to Chris's parents, maintaining a polite and caring tone. However, try to improve your greeting and closing remarks. Although 'Dear Mr and Mrs Mhsawde' is a good start, it could be further personalized if you are aware of their first names or titles. In closing, 'Your lovingly' is a nice touch but ensure consistency in your relationship with the person, 'Yours sincerely' might better suit less personal contexts.

Single Idea per Paragraph

Ensure each paragraph deals with a single idea. The first paragraph could focus solely on gratitude for the invitation and your thoughts on how quickly time has passed since childhood. Separating your explanation on why you won’t be able to attend into its own paragraph would enhance clarity. You have done this well, but maintaining this structure consistently will further improve your letter's coherence.

Logical Structure

The logical structure of your letter flows well, starting with the introduction and gratitude, moving to the explanation of your absence, and culminating in your plan to visit. To strengthen logical transitions, you might add a sentence linking your inability to attend the birthday with your plan to visit Australia, making the overall narrative more cohesive.

Complete Response

While your response fits the task requirements, consider expanding on your explanation for not attending. For example, briefly describe the nature of the business meeting and its importance, which will give more depth to your regret for missing the birthday. Additionally, expanding on what you plan to do with Chris during your visit could enrich your letter and further display your enthusiasm and the significance of the visit.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

240 words

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