Writing task 1 General training -The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris parents . In your letter -Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party. -Explain why you won’t be able to attend the party - Give details of plan to see Chris at a different time
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Dear Mr and Mrs Mhsawde
I hope
this
letter finds you in a
radiant health and Remove the article
apply
best
of Correct article usage
the best
spirit
. Fix the agreement mistake
spirits
Firstly
, I would like to thank you for sending the invitation of
Chris’s 25th birthday , it feels like yesterday we were playing in the park as a child and today we are all grown up , I must say time just flies so fast .
Since we were kids I remember how Chris used to like Change preposition
to
surprise
parties and surprise
gifts , the smile and joy on his face makes
every arrangement Correct subject-verb agreement
make
worth
. I am sure Replace the word
worthwhile
this
time he will feel same
joy and will enjoy the Add an article
the same
surprise
party. However
due to
my important business meeting on the same day , unfortunately
I am unable to attend the party. I cannot express how sad I am feeling , because I won’t be present there Add the comma(s)
unfortunately,
on
Chris ’s birthday celebration but I promise I will compensate Change preposition
at
to
him .
For a long Change preposition
apply
time
I was actually thinking of visiting Australia to meet Chris and Add a comma
time,
finally
I have booked tickets for next month . I will be arriving on 9th January and on 10th of January I will visit your house to Add a comma
finally,
surprise
him . I would really appreciate if
you keep Correct pronoun usage
it if
this
plan a secret until I get there. I cannot express this
in words Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
how excited I am to see him.
Hoping to see you soon.
Your lovingly,
ParthviCorrect pronoun usage
apply
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Greeting and Closing
Your letter successfully delivers the message to Chris's parents, maintaining a polite and caring tone. However, try to improve your greeting and closing remarks. Although 'Dear Mr and Mrs Mhsawde' is a good start, it could be further personalized if you are aware of their first names or titles. In closing, 'Your lovingly' is a nice touch but ensure consistency in your relationship with the person, 'Yours sincerely' might better suit less personal contexts.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Ensure each paragraph deals with a single idea. The first paragraph could focus solely on gratitude for the invitation and your thoughts on how quickly time has passed since childhood. Separating your explanation on why you won’t be able to attend into its own paragraph would enhance clarity. You have done this well, but maintaining this structure consistently will further improve your letter's coherence.
Logical Structure
The logical structure of your letter flows well, starting with the introduction and gratitude, moving to the explanation of your absence, and culminating in your plan to visit. To strengthen logical transitions, you might add a sentence linking your inability to attend the birthday with your plan to visit Australia, making the overall narrative more cohesive.
Complete Response
While your response fits the task requirements, consider expanding on your explanation for not attending. For example, briefly describe the nature of the business meeting and its importance, which will give more depth to your regret for missing the birthday. Additionally, expanding on what you plan to do with Chris during your visit could enrich your letter and further display your enthusiasm and the significance of the visit.