The diagram describes the production of canned fruits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of fruit cans production.
It is conspicuous that the whole manufacturing process consists of fourteen distinct stages, from picking the
fruits
to selling the end products in the supermarket.
Before making canned Use synonyms
fruits
, there are some previous preparations. Use synonyms
At the first stage
of production, those Linking Words
fruits
need to be picked from the trees. Use synonyms
Next,
all of them are transported to factories, where the good ones can be selected, weighed and washed, Linking Words
then
kept refrigerated, which makes them easy to be peeled.
The following procedures begin with cutting the peeled ones into pieces. Those pieces are put into some liquid, Linking Words
such
as water, juice, syrup, etc., and Linking Words
then
sealed equally into each can. At the eleventh stage of production, all cans need to be cooked under heat for sterilizing. After cooling down and being packed well, the finished canned Linking Words
fruits
can Use synonyms
finally
be on store shelves in the supermarket.Linking Words
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