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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns ad cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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E-commerce business has changed the traditional ways of shopping because of carrying some major advantages.
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, I contend that it can never replace outlets completely
due to
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 some drawbacks associated with it. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss
this
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 view with examples. First of all, purchasing an
item
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 on the internet always carries a risk of a wrong selection, as items can not be touched, felt and seen physically. So, a wrong placement could be a waste of money when there is no replacement policy offered by the supplier, even though, if it exists, it actually costs a buyer more time to replace the
item
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.
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,
last
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 year, I ordered a hair serum from Naheed, but an expired product was delivered to me. They refund the amount in the form of a voucher which I could only use at the same superstore,
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, they charged me the delivery fees for the expired product, despite the fact, that it was of no use
for
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 me.
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, an e-commerce trade charges higher delivery charges which made an
item
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 more expensive than an
item
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 at a physical shop.
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, some suppliers set a higher slab on the minimum purchasing, so a visitor had to buy more items to fill his cart to reach the minimum amount of slab.
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, The Food Panda Mart, an online shopping platform, does not allow a check-out on purchasing below PKR 5000,
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, a user had to spend more money to reach the defined slab.
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,
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 the fact that online shopping websites are very convenient to make online purchases,
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, can not replace marts and shops in the region completely because shopping on the internet is actually costing more money and time.
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