The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The
table
and charts illustrate the information about
police
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budget in
the
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Britain between 2017 and 2018 and the
table
shows Britain's three sources where government get
money
and the charts represent how that
money
was spent.
Overall
, in the
table
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the percentage of national government was in the highest proportion
both
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year
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,
while
other sources (eg grants) were in the lowest proportion. In the
charts
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most of the
money
was spent on the officers
ans
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and
stuff
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staff
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wages than technology. It can be seen that in the
table
the number of
money
came
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from
national
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government from 175.5m to 177.8m between 2017 and 2018 ,
on the other
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the percentage of other sources was in the least position at 38m and 38.5m from 2017 to 2018. The figure for local taxes peaked at 102.3m in 2018, before reached at 91.2m in 2017. Total income was at 304.7m which increased in 2018
of
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318.6m
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, most of
those
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money
was spent on
officers's
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and staff 's salaries which
was
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75% in 2017 and it decreased slowly to 69%, on
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other
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side , in 2017 technology was at the least amount
to
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8% and it rose to 14% in 2018. The proportion of building and transport remained stable at 17% in the
last
two years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words table, money, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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