In the future robots may do more of the work that is done by humans today. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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the upcoming years,
robots
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work.
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case is very likely to happen, especially when the
technology
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is getting cheaper and more accessible. Right now robotic
technology
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used by various
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industries
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like automotive, services, and mining. The benefit of using
robots
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and can affect
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of
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durability,
robots
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widely used to
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humans to do
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the deepest ocean, or
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in hot volcanic lava. Meanwhile, in industry, using
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machines can be more efficient, productive and
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conflict to handle.
Furthermore
, AI can easily
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, so it would be
lots
easier to make intelligent machines than to educate
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. As opposed to what already stated in
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paragraph, using
robots
is
also
bring
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drawbacks.
For example
, if more industries prefer using
machine
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than
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, job scarcity is avoidable. It could bring the meltdown of economics because
lots
of people do not have any income.
Furthermore
, it is possible
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could threaten human life. It may
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like taken from a science fiction movie, but even Ellon Musk believe that could really
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.
Besides
, the machines that take over too
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works
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also
could promote laziness, and
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could lead to unfit and unhealthy peoples. Even
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equal
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if robotic
technology
is used with good regulation and limitation,
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usage of it could be astonishing.
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of
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could take benefit
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this
technology
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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