The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998

The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998
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The table diagram illustrates the percentages of income,which was spent on food,electronic equipment,music and videos in the UK in 1998.
Overall
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,
that is
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clear that every
section
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has a leader of the chart,which differs significantly.It can be seen that all age groups were the leaders in some areas ,except men and adults. In the food ,
section
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it can be seen that
women
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bought it the most(39%),
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others barely had a
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higher than 10,except men.,
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in the other
section
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,which is electronic equipment,
women
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had a notable fall to 1%,
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children rose to 23% and took the first place. In the music ,
section
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children went in second place after girls whose percentage
number
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is 40.,
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it can be observed that adults,men and
women
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had the same
number
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(5%),which made them outsiders.In the video ,purchases all the members had a score lower than 20.
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,some of them,like
women
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,even had a
number
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lower than 1%,which made them the total outsiders
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words section, women, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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