The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998
The table diagram illustrates the percentages of income,which was spent on food,electronic equipment,music and videos in the UK in 1998.
Overall
,that is
clear that every section
has a leader of the chart,which differs significantly.It can be seen that all age groups were the leaders in some areas ,except men and adults.
In the food ,section
it can be seen that women
bought it the most(39%),while
others barely had a number
higher than 10,except men.,However
in the other section
,which is electronic equipment, women
had a notable fall to 1%,while
children rose to 23% and took the first place.
In the music ,section
children went in second place after girls whose percentage number
is 40.,Besides
it can be observed that adults,men and women
had the same number
(5%),which made them outsiders.In the video ,purchases all the members had a score lower than 20.Moreover
,some of them,like women
,even had a number
lower than 1%,which made them the total outsidersSubmitted by andriykolomiyets12 on
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