In some countries, more and more parents begin to teach their children at home rather than send them to school. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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of
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dispatch
them to the education facilities, many families
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countries start to teach their
children
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at home. For me,
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trend
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is
disadvatageous
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disadvantageous
for
children
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because
parents
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cannot teach them lessons as the teachers do.
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, with
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trend
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,
children
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are deprived
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school
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and it would be
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for their improvement. The first disadvantage of
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trend
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is
parents
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' inadequate teaching skills.
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families have abilities to educate their
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for
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some basic lessons, they cannot overcome
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situation in
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For instance
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children
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need experts to learn mathematics and science lessons,
their
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moms
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mom's
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and
dads
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knowledge and teaching methods may be
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in order to understand
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them.
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,
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may suffer in disciplining their boys and girls
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emotional ties
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them.
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presents considerable issues
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pupil's
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development. The second disadvantage of
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trend
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is
children
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's deprivation from school
life
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.
Children
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need to create some relationships and it is essential in order to thrive
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social skills. Without a school
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, they cannot be social and
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may get some psychological issues in the future.
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, they may gain kilos
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their
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activities at home.
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,
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development may be detrimental
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their
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
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case.
Although
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teaching at home presents some benefits for kids at the beginning, in my opinion, its drawbacks outweigh its benefits
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parents
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' inferior traits of teaching and negative impacts
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children
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's social skills.
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