You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter 1. Say which points in the article you agree with 2. Explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres 3. Offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter regarding your

last

week article in "Daily News Ontario". You have covered a lot of information about my

city

but it seems you have not published it in a complete manner. I agree with the facilities and security facts about

Kitchener

that you have explained very precisely.

Moreover

, I am happy with the detailed description of employment opportunities in certain IT companies that you have mentioned because

Kitchener

is the IT hub. But I am not satisfied with the background history of my

city

explained in your article.

This

city

is the largest

city

within the Grand River watershed which has beautiful attraction sites for tourists. Because it is the perfect blend of trails and water bodies

this

city

gives the best scenic views in every town.

Also

, you have mentioned the polluted areas of my

city

, I want to correct you,

Kitchener

is one of the clean cities in Ontario where the air quality index is more sustainable. As I am a native of

Kitchener

and provide sessions to international students I offer you to join me

this

weekend for the

city

tour. I will show you more astonishing facts about

this

city

. I hope you won't mind to join my session. Yours faithfully, Navdeep Kaur

Submitted by knavdeep3011 on Wed Nov 29 2023

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Structure

Ensure each paragraph clearly presents and develops one central idea. The paragraphs in the letter somewhat blend different topics, making the overall structure less clear.

Task Response

To improve task response, focus more on the specific instructions given in the task. While you did engage with the article mentioned and provided an offer for a tour, consider expanding on each point and providing a more in-depth commentary on the ways your town centre differs from others.

Tone

The greeting and closing are adequate for a formal letter. However, the closing sentence "I hope you won't mind to join my session." could be more formal and clear. Consider revising it to something like, "I hope you will accept my invitation to join me for a city tour."

Tone

A more consistent and formal tone is required for a letter to a newspaper editor. Avoid informal phrases and ensure proper formal letter etiquette is followed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

214 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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