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Nowadays, many people spend less and less time with family. Why is this happening? How does this affect individuals and their families?

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In today's modern world,
families
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 have lost their role.In many societies, a majority of communities don'
t
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 spend a lot of
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 with their
families
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 compared to the past.In
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 essay , I will discuss why some people cannot spend their
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 with their
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,and I will highlight which causes on individual and their
families
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.
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, the young generation prefers to be independent.So, they need to have a job and sometimes, they have to study and work.
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, they don'
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 have free
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 for spending with their
families
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, because of the high level of progress in Technology, the young generation prefers to spend their
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 playing online games or working with their devices. In
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 regard, since people don'
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 spend
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 with their
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, they will be faced with some difficulties.
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, for a long
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 ,They will be in a dander with an emotional problem or they are used to be lived alone.
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, sometimes they need to make friends with strangers that bring
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negative energy to them, because they don'
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 know , who they are exactly. In conclusion, for the number of reasons mentioned above, in my opinion, it is mandatory that people specialize
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 with their
families
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 because they are familiar exactly each other and they don'
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 want to hurt each other.

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