The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

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changes the village named Reymouth

undergone

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from 1995 to now.

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, a comparison of

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maps reveals that a lot of changes occurred in these 29 years. Major developments are the construction of tennis courts, golf club, restaurants and apartments. Analyzing the graph, it can be clearly seen that,

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farmland was close to what used to be a forest park in 1995, situated to the north of the hotel is now converted into a golf club. The forest near

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is removed and replaced with a new tennis court.

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, a new car parking lot is set up next to the hotel.

Moreover

, some houses were

also

built in the housing area.

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, the shops south of the housing area were demolished and replaced with restaurants. The apartments had been constructed by knocking down the fish market to the west of the cafe. With the flow of time, the fishing port in the sea

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview

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Living in the countryside is better than living in the city. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?