The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.
The map illustrates how
much
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changes the village named Reymouth
undergone
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has undergone
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from 1995 to now.
Overall
, a comparison of
two
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the two
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maps reveals that a lot of changes occurred in these 29 years. Major developments are the construction of tennis courts, golf club, restaurants and apartments. Analyzing the graph, it can be clearly seen that,
a
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farmland was close to what used to be a forest park in 1995, situated to the north of the hotel is now converted into a golf club. The forest near
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the farmland
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is removed and replaced with a new tennis court.
However
, a new car parking lot is set up next to the hotel.
Moreover
, some houses were
also
built in the housing area.
Furthermore
, the shops south of the housing area were demolished and replaced with restaurants. The apartments had been constructed by knocking down the fish market to the west of the cafe. With the flow of time, the fishing port in the sea
is vanished
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into
water
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the water
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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