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although many people value, this space could be better used for other purposes to what extent do you agree of disagree with this?

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It is irrefutable that a lot of
people
 absolutely love their
parks
;
however
, some
people
 opine that the area occupied by
parks
 can be utilized in a more beneficial way by building residential and commercial structures there. I agree with
this
 view and in my opinion,
this
 is the best way to utilize the land occupied by public
parks
.
Firstly
, building more residential spaces will give a chance to poor
people
 to find affordable accommodation/
homes
. Property prices are pretty high in most
cities
 around the world because of the scarcity of land. Converting
parks
 into residential areas will free up more space where new buildings can be built. If more
homes
 are built, prices will come down and
homes
 will be more affordable to poor
people
.
Consequently
, they will not have to live in the unhygienic shanties that are common in highly congested
cities
 like Mumbai. If
parks
 are used for building commercial establishments, it is good for the economy too. Of course,
this
 conversion is bad for the environment and air quality.
However
, considering the huge population that requires
homes
 in
cities
,
this
 is the price that we have to pay for making
homes
 affordable and available to the masses. If poor
people
 cannot find
homes
 and are forced to live in slums, it is not good for them or the city as the slums could be breeding grounds for various infectious diseases and even crime.
To conclude
,
parks
 are certainly a necessity; unfortunately, for the vast majority of space-starved
cities
 in the developing world, they are a luxury. Since building
homes
 is a more pressing need than improving air quality or offering relaxation, in my opinion,
parks
 should be converted into residential or commercial areas.
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