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The diagram below shows the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004.

The diagram below shows the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004.
#site #school #plan #changes
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The map illustrates the area of a
school
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 in 2004 and the plan for
development
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the development
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to
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of
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 the
school
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 site after two decades.
Overall
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, a lot of changes will occur including the construction of
school
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 building 3, car park 2 and widening the road. By establishing another
school
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 building, the
school
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 will be able to accommodate quite a few students. In 2004, 600 students used to attend the
school
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, but
according to
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new
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the new
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structure
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 it is expected that 1000 students can join the
school
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.
However
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, the
sport
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sports
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 field to the
north-east
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northeast
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 of
the
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apply
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school
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 building 2 will be demolished and replaced with
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school
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the school
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 building 3, but a new sports field will be developed to the
south-east
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southeast
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 of
school
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 building 2.
Furthermore
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, the path running from
main
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the main
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 entrance to
sports
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the sports
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 field will be narrowed and
school
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 building 1 and
school
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 building 2 will be connected.
Then
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 a shorter path will be created, which will link all three
school
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 buildings.
Moreover
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, the road to the
south-west
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southwest
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 of
main
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the main
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 entrance will be extended and a new car park will be set up to the east of the
school
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 building 3.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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