The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
The pie chart here
potrays
the information about Correct your spelling
portrays
world's
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the world's
population
and the world
's resource consumption followed by world
spending on recources
.
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resources
it is clear that
the highest population
is recorded in Asia
that
covers more than half of the Correct pronoun usage
which
world
's population
. According to
the chart Asia
is spending 18% on transport. In addition
to this
Europe
, America and Africa
's population
contributes to around 38% collectively. Europe
spends most on food which
24%, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
Africa
is more concentrated on housing (12%).
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it is shown that the highest Add a comma
,Secondly
population
is recorded in Asia
that
covers more than half of the Correct pronoun usage
which
world
's share. Records show that Asia
is spending 18% on transport. In addition
to this
Europe
, America and Africa
's population
contributes to around 38% collectively. Europe
spends most on food which
24%, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
africa
is more concentrated on housing (12%).
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Africa
Remaining
5% Correct article usage
The remaining
population
spends about 40% on other stuff, which is the heighest
shareCorrect your spelling
highest
..
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.
...
Moreover
, America's share in spending is the least i.e 6% in clothing
sector.Add an article
the clothing
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