The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
The pie chart here
potrays
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portrays
the information about
world's
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the world's
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population
and the
world
's resource consumption followed by
world
spending on
recources
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resources
. Moving forward
it is clear that
the highest
population
is recorded in
Asia
that
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which
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covers more than half of the
world
's
population
.
According to
the chart
Asia
is spending 18% on transport.
In addition
to
this
Europe
, America and
Africa
's
population
contributes to around 38% collectively.
Europe
spends most on food
which
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apply
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24%,
while
Africa
is more concentrated on housing (12%).
Secondly
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it is shown that the highest
population
is recorded in
Asia
that
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which
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covers more than half of the
world
's share. Records show that
Asia
is spending 18% on transport.
In addition
to
this
Europe
, America and
Africa
's
population
contributes to around 38% collectively.
Europe
spends most on food
which
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apply
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24%,
while
africa
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Africa
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is more concentrated on housing (12%).
Remaining
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The remaining
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5%
population
spends about 40% on other stuff, which is the
heighest
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highest
share
..
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.
...
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Moreover
, America's share in spending is the least i.e 6% in
clothing
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the clothing
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sector.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, asia, europe, africa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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