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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph illustrates the volume of Caribbean
Island
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 tourists staying on cruise ships and staying on the
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. The unit is measured in millions of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were travelling on the
island
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 fluctuated meanwhile people who were travelling on cruise ships rose with some fluctuations.
However
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, the total
number
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 of travellers experienced a remarkably increased over the period of
time
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. The sum of
visitors
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 was 1
million
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 at the beginning and steadily increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2012. Three years later, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 plumed to around 2.75
million
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 and
finally
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, reached the highest point at 3.5
million
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 in 2017. Regarding the
number
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 of people who were spending
time
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 on the
island
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, at the beginning of the
time
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, they were around 0.75
million
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then
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 stayed constant until the end of the year 2011. After that, the
number
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 of travellers sharply increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013, dropped to roughly 0.25
million
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 in 2016 and went up to 1.5
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
This
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 means that the volume of people who were spending
time
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 on cruise ships was around 0.25
million
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 in 2010
then
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 grew to 0.5
million
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 in 2011 and hit the floor of approximately 0.25
million
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 in the year 2012.
Moreover
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, in 2016, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 dramatically increased to 1.5
million
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 and reached a peak of 2
million
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 throughout the period of
time
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, number, time, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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