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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities.
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, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each
gender
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 in every
university
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 subject. Having the same number of men and women on all degree
courses
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 is simply unrealistic. Student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a
university
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 decided to fill
courses
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 with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each
gender
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. In reality, many
courses
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 are more popular with one
gender
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 than the other, and it would not be practical to aim for equal proportions.
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, nursing
courses
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 tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these
courses
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 if fifty per cent of the places needed to go to males. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
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 believe that it would be unfair to base admission to
university
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courses
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 on
gender
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. Universities should continue to select the best candidates for each course
according to
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 their qualifications. In
this
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 way, both men and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work hard to achieve good grades at school. If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it is surely wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications. In conclusion, the selection of
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 students should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on
gender
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.
Submitted by Deadline 8th April IELTS on

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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