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Environmental problems are caused by technological development. Some people say that the solution to these problems is for everyone to lead a simpler way of life while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#development #people #life #technology
the graph illustrates the
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percentage
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emissions
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 individual in four countries in the given period (1967-2007).
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tendency
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, the four of them are becoming closer to 6 metric tonnes.
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 it is start at about 11 metric tonnes in 1967
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decline
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average
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 2007 ,
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rocket
 up to just above 10
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siginficantly
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significantly
 to nearly under 6 metric tonnes in 2007.
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 it steady at 7.5 between the period 1997 and 2007.
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mildly
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 from 1997 to 2007.
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