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Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
Nowadays,
during
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 the internet and social
media
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 we have a huge variety of famous
people
. We can see them on TV, hearing on
a
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the
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 radio or see them on an advertising board during our journey or going to work . Some of those
people
 suffer from the abnormal treatment of the exaggerated
attention
 of media and private
people
. Some of them are ready to pay a fee for their fame and somebody are not, and
this
attention
 disturbs them and their family members. In my ,opinion the
people
 who have decided to be famous or known either on social media or on TV have to be ready for extreme
attention
 for your person. In
this
essay
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 I will
try
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totry
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 relate to both views and provide an example.
Firstly
, I want to speak about
people
 who know that their fame is part of the game and they do not try to hide it from
people
's eyes. Those
people
 usually do not sit at home,
,
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moreover
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 they try to join some social events, and they visit the children at hospitals, even though they make photos with everybody who wants it. In
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other words
otherwords
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 they like those lives and enjoy them. The best examples in my opinion are Ronaldo and Messi.
Secondly
,I would
like
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 speak about
a
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famous
people
 who try to avoid
an
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extremaly
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extremely
attention
 and suffer a lot from invasion into their private life.Those
people
 do not expose to the Internet their or their family
members
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members'
member's
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 photos
to
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, they do not sign the photos and do not take a part in social or charity events. A good example of those famous
people
 is Gorge Cluny. In conclusion,
this
 group of
people
 is divided into two. One group likes
attention
 and does not worry about
this
, and another group is extremally opposite.
Anyway
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 we like them a lot and will continue to love them even though they do not sign our photo by request.
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