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The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs give information about mobile
phone
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owners
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 using various mobile
phone
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 features in 2006, 2008 and 2010. It can be inferred that making calls, sending and receiving text messages and taking photos were the top three features that mobile
phone
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owners
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 mostly used. On top of that, 100% of mobile
phone
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owners
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 were using their phones to make calls in 2006 and 2008.
Although
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 messaging application was a bit popular in 2010, making calls was still a favourite among mobile
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owners
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 as illustrated from the graphs, the percentage slightly fell by only 1%. Sending and receiving messages have been done by 73% of mobile
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owners
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 in 2006. It significantly increased to 75% in 2008 and added four more per cent in 2010.
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, as technology always developed from time to time, the camera feature on the mobile
phone
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 was used by 66% of mobile
phone
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owners
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 in 2006 and significantly grew by 10% in the
last
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, owners with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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