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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
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Environmental protection and
cleanliness
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is
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are
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a
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the
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 responsibility of all individuals living
in
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on
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this
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 planet.
While
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 other people believe that only
government
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 and large companies can make a difference to improve our mother nature, I completely disagree
on
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with
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this
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 statement as
normal
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a normal
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citizen
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citizens
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 can
also
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 do their part in protecting and improving the environment. On the one hand,
government
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 and large companies can use their resources in cleaning and protecting the environment. Their
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
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 and manpower resources are great tools to effectively clean and protect the
enviroment
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environment
 in the fastest way. Aside from that, they
also
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 have the financial means to support
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an organization
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organization
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organizations
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 like
cleanliness
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drive
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drives
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 in order to maintain the
cleanliness
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 of the surrounding.
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,
government
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 and
large scale
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large-scale
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 businesses play a vital part in environmental
cleanliness
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 and protection.
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, it is
everyone
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everyone's
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 responsibility to protect
our
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apply
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mother earth, whether how big or small we are. By doing simple
gesture
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gestures
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 like proper waste disposal, avoiding littering in the street and not doing vandalism
on
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in
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 public places are much of
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an enourmous
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enourmous
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enormous
way
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ways
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in
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of
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 saving our planet.
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, a regular citizen who puts up a
cleanliness
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 drive in order to clean the stagnant river
,
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apply
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 makes an enormous change to the
eneviroment
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environment
.
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, it doesn't
necessarry
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necessary
necessarily
 to be in the position or owning a company in order to help, as long as people take their own part in making the environment
nice
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a nice
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 place to live in. In conclusion,
although
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government
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the government
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 and huge companies can assist
for
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in
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 the improvement and beautification of the surrounding, I do believe that even
simple
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a simple
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indiviual
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individual
 has
a
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the
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 power to make a difference for
our
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apply
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mother nature.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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