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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below
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The two given charts illustrate the report on adult education. The bar chart depicts some reasons
about
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 the decision of adults to pursue their study,
while
 the pie chart
demonstrate
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 their opinion regarding how the tuition fee should be shared.
Overall
, it is
celar
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clear
 that the two main reasons for most
of
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the adult
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adult
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adults
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 to continue their education were their interest in the subjects and to gain qualifications.
In contrast
, a significant number of
students
were agree
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 that their tuition fees should be paid by
theirselves
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themselves
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. Looking into details, the popular reason for the majority of
students
 pursuing their educational studies was their interest in
subject
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 with 40
students
 in total. The second largest
students
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number of students
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 (38) aspired to obtain some qualifications,
whereas
 the percentage of adult learning because of helping them
for
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 their current job, increasing
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the possibilty
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possibilty
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possibility
 to promote their position, and simply enjoy to learn was approximately 20
students
. The least
favorable
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 reason' figure was meeting new people with the small
figrue
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figure
 with only 9 people. Many adults learner chose
their
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 tuition fees should be paid by
theirselves
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themselves
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with
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around 40%,
while
 a quarter of them chose to be
aid
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 by taxpayers.
The
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 moderate percentage of
students
 wanted 35 per cent of their cost
of course
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, of course,
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 should be paid by employers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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