Buying things online such as books, flight tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of such purchases outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
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Internet play
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role by means of online shopping, booking goods and other multiple uses. The usage has
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drastically increased apart from several years ago. More than 90% of
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the world
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world
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population
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their needs by themselves. The upcoming paragraphs explained about advantages and disadvantages of an online business. Currently, the method of buying
a products
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products
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has
transfered
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transferred
from offline to
doorstep
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.
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pupil has to find a suitable time to buy their requirements and most probably choose weekends to spend in shops. In fact, most individuals plan on weekends which
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to overcrowding in almost centre. As the Internet came
onto
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picture
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most
of
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merchants
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the merchants
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shift their marketing
procedure
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procedures
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and customer
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co-operated
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more to purchase
the
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things. In
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busy life schedule, people
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no
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not
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need to spend hours of time rather within
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a few
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minutes could order their needs in which product details briefly
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along with
that reviews given by
other customer
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another customer
other customers
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will make them satisfactory to be part of an item.
Hence
, crores of material
available
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with
brand
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the brand
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name
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.
Thus
, it is found more useful but
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drawback found is sometimes quality may not distinguish earlier.
On the other hand
, most
of
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pupils
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the pupils
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booking
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bus
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buses
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,
train
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trains
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,
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and flight
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flight
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flights
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including
taxi
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through
variety
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a variety
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of software applications. The Redbus or
an
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apply
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Ixigo booking applications
which
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help people to book their seats even
couple
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a couple
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of months ago. The Payment procedure made quite simple with safe, genuine and if we need to cancel the tickets with tiny steps to be followed .
Moreover
, as per the
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,policy
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almost
fund
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funds
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get credited
in
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to
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our bank account. Presently, only the person who
don't
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have knowledge
modern
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of modern
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technology were ongoing to paper method.
Thus
, these two examples will overweigh the advantage. In conclusion, the popularity of Internet marketing
found
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huge answerable.
Thus
, it is having huge value and everybody should learn how to implement
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it rather
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than depending on
second
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person.
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