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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line graph shows how the electrical appliance in
ownership
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 in households in a country changed over the period from the beginning of 1920
while
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 the second graph outlines how it affected the
time
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 spend on household work per week in
this
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 country and during that period.
Overall
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,
ownership
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 of all three appliances increased during
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 whole period. At that same
time
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, the amount of
time
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 spent on homework declined.
It is clear that
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, in 1920, washing machines were the most common of the three electric devices with
ownership
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 reaching 40% of households.
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 number increased rapidly to about 75% by 2019, with only a small decrease in 1980. Apart from that, vacuum cleaners in
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 reached the highest point of about 100% in 2000. In comparison, almost no households had a refrigerator in 1920.
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,
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 increased rapidly and by 1980 there was one in every household. The amount of
time
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 spent on doing homework
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 first decreased significantly from 50 to nearly 15 hours a week per household between 1920 and 2018. Even though obviously it experienced only a small decline to just over 10 hours per week in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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