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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #governments #space #programmes #services #schools #hospitals
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 that, education and medical
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much
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 more important than cosmos programmes. I fully disagree
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 statement because cosmos programmes
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 beneficial areas
such
 as agriculture, forecasting, artificial
intelengence
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intelligence
 and investigation
in
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into
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 aliens.
Firstly
,
study
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cosmos
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the cosmos
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teachs
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teaches
teach
 us how to prevent
nature
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 disasters like meteoroids, earthquakes,
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and tsunamies
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tsunamies
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tsunamis
tsunami
.
Secondly
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 forecasting gives advantages to farmers in order to protect plant lands from coming danger.
For instance
,
last
 year there was published in "The Times newspaper " that
this
 summer drought will come,
for
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 that reason farmers used
of
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apply
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technological tools. Another example is
space
 technology learning helps farmers to protect their areas from heavy rains and upcoming storms.
On the other hand
, nowadays artificial intelligence is developing better than in past. Learning AI and applying it to
space
 learning will make
people
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people's
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 life easy.
For example
, Nasa
last
 year did research about upcoming meteoroid
path
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 and artificial intelligence draw a line from
space
 to earth where
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 landing will be. That made
space
employees
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employees'
employee's
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 job much simple. Another advantage is searching
different
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for different
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 life on different planets. There are a lot of saying that people who saw ufos’
on
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sky
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the sky
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 and on one news in America area called 51
ufo
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UFOs
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 landed.
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,
in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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 lots of information were about it.
To conclude
, I strongly agree that learning
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place
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places
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that
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 you do not live and predicting danger from
space
 nowadays are more important for earth people. Government must spend their most salary on
space
 learning because I believe that humans can
also
 live
in
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 different planets and there
a
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lot of things that
needs
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 research
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