The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that, education and medical
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more important than cosmos programmes. I fully disagree
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statement because cosmos programmes
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beneficial areas
such
as agriculture, forecasting, artificial
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intelligence
and investigation
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aliens.
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,
study
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cosmos
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teachs
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teaches
teach
us how to prevent
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disasters like meteoroids, earthquakes,
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and tsunamies
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tsunamies
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tsunamis
tsunami
.
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forecasting gives advantages to farmers in order to protect plant lands from coming danger.
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,
last
year there was published in "The Times newspaper " that
this
summer drought will come,
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that reason farmers used
of
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technological tools. Another example is
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technology learning helps farmers to protect their areas from heavy rains and upcoming storms.
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, nowadays artificial intelligence is developing better than in past. Learning AI and applying it to
space
learning will make
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life easy.
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, Nasa
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year did research about upcoming meteoroid
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and artificial intelligence draw a line from
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to earth where
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landing will be. That made
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employees
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job much simple. Another advantage is searching
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life on different planets. There are a lot of saying that people who saw ufos’
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and on one news in America area called 51
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landed.
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internet
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lots of information were about it.
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, I strongly agree that learning
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that
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you do not live and predicting danger from
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nowadays are more important for earth people. Government must spend their most salary on
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learning because I believe that humans can
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different planets and there
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lot of things that
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research
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