The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
This
line graph represents the
number
of
people
who stayed on a certain Caribbean
island
during their visit between the seven years
during
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2010-2017.
Also
, the chart shows the details of residency
such
as who stayed on the
island
or stayed on the
cruise
ship. The
number
of
tourists
who stayed on the
cruise
ships
during their visits in 2010, started from a quarter
million
,
while
on the other hand
, about 0.75
million
people
preferred to stay on the
island
itself. The next year, in 2011, the
number
of
tourists
who stayed on
cruise
ships
doubled and reached half a
million
.
While
at the same time, there were no changes in the
number
of visitors who stayed on the
island
, remaining at three-quarters of a
million
. It is clearly visible that from 2011 to 2013 the
number
of
people
stayed
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on
cruise
ships
started to double, reaching 1.5
million
, and
leveled
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off during the next two years,
in contrast
, the
number
of
tourists
who stayed on the
island
declined to 250 thousand
people
and after 2012 started to surge reaching an all-time high of 2
million
people
at the end
of the span,2017. the total
number
of
people
who visited that particular
island
started from 1
million
and increased dramatically reaching an all-time high of 3.5
million
in 2017.
To conclude
, staying on
cruise
ships
was
tourists
’ main preference till mid-2015, and after that staying on the
island
became more attractive to
tourists
.
Overall
,
people
like to visit and stay on that Caribbean
island
.
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