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The money spent by goverments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #goverments #space #programmes #services #schools #hospitals
On the other hand
, nowadays artificial intelligence is developing better than in past. Learning AI and applying it to
space
 learning will make
people
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 life easy.
For example
, Nasa
last
 year did research about upcoming meteoroid
path
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 and artificial intelligence draw a line from
space
 to earth where
final
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 landing will be. That made
space
employees
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 job much simple. Another advantage is searching
different
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for different
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 life on different planets. There are a lot of saying that people who saw ufos’
on
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in
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sky
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 and on one news in America area called 51
ufo
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UFOs
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 landed.
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,
in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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 lots of information were about it.
To conclude
, I strongly agree that learning
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place
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that
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 you do not live and predicting danger from
space
 nowadays are more important for earth people. Government must spend their most salary on
space
 learning because I believe that humans can
also
 live
in
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on
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 different planets and there
a
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lot of things that
needs
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 research
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