The money spent by goverments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, nowadays artificial intelligence is developing better than in past. Learning AI and applying it to

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life easy.

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and artificial intelligence draw a line from

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to earth where

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landing will be. That made

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job much simple. Another advantage is searching

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life on different planets. There are a lot of saying that people who saw ufos’

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you do not live and predicting danger from

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nowadays are more important for earth people. Government must spend their most salary on

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The money spent by goverments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many countries, people decide to have children at a later age than in the past. Why? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than work for a company or organisation. Why is this the case ? What are the disadvantages?

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some university students want to learn about other subjects, discuss both the view that is important and the view that studying for a qualification should be the priority