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In cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In today's modern world, one of the controversial issues among
people
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 is
traffic
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. In many societies, the high level of
traffic
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 has become widely common. In my opinion,
traffic
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 originated from the high level of
population
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 and low demand for using public transport.Below, some solutions are presented. One of the most important reasons for the high rate of
traffic
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 in
cities
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 and towns
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 the
population
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.A majority of
people
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 prefer to live in
cities
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 and towns because of more equipment.So, the amount of
population
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 is increased significantly.
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, every year new students enter
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 because of their universities or some workers would be entered because of their job offers.
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, most of them have a family that they need to go to school , jobs and purchases. The second important reason that causes the
traffic
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 in
cities
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 and towns is that most
people
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 prefer to use a private car and
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 , some of them have different cars.
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, many cars are in the streets and will be faced the
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. For solving
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 problem,
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 situation should be changed.
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, the government should be announced to
people
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 the negative effects on the
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 by holding workshops or news and
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 should set rules for using private cars in busy times.
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, the government should be encouraged
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 for using public transport.
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,
people
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 can use bicycles or walk during busy times. In conclusion, for the number of reasons mentioned above, I believe that
traffic
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 is the result of the high rate of
population
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 and a low rate of using public transport that the government by setting
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useful rules can control
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 situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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