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In cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In today's modern world, one of the controversial issues among
people
 is
traffic
. In many societies, the high level of
traffic
 has become widely common. In my opinion,
traffic
 originated from the high level of
population
 and low demand for using public transport.Below, some solutions are presented. One of the most important reasons for the high rate of
traffic
 in
cities
 and towns
is
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in
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 the
population
.A majority of
people
 prefer to live in
cities
 and towns because of more equipment.So, the amount of
population
 is increased significantly.
For example
, every year new students enter
cities
 because of their universities or some workers would be entered because of their job offers.
In addition
, most of them have a family that they need to go to school , jobs and purchases. The second important reason that causes the
traffic
 in
cities
 and towns is that most
people
 prefer to use a private car and
also
 , some of them have different cars.
As a result
, many cars are in the streets and will be faced the
traffic
. For solving
this
 problem,
this
 situation should be changed.
Firstly
, the government should be announced to
people
 the negative effects on the
population
 by holding workshops or news and
also
 should set rules for using private cars in busy times.
Secondly
, the government should be encouraged
people
 for using public transport.
Furthermore
,
people
 can use bicycles or walk during busy times. In conclusion, for the number of reasons mentioned above, I believe that
traffic
 is the result of the high rate of
population
 and a low rate of using public transport that the government by setting
a
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apply
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useful rules can control
this
 situation.
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