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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem

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In
this
 technological era, apart from their working hours, many individuals do not get sufficient time to do physical exercise, which may ultimately lead to various medical
issues
such
 as Obesity, and Eye problems. In
this
 essay, I would like to discuss the reasons why the employer and all the employees are unable to do any activity that makes them fit.
In addition
 to that, what measures should be taken to solve
this
 problem? On one hand, in
this
 competitive world, in order to get a job promotion, people have to work hard before and after office hours. That means no time for their personal kinds of stuff
such
 as spending time with family and aerobics. Eventually, all
this
 may lead to health-related
issues
 like Obesity.
For instance
, an article was published in the Tribune newspaper and it was noted that 2022 statistical data shows that the number of working men and women have various medical
issues
 as compared to non-working.
Moreover
, it depends on individual lifestyle as well
that is
 if they have to go to a nearby place they prefer to go by private transport
instead
 of going on a walk.
On the other hand
, in order to reduce
this
 widespread issue, initiatives have to be taken both at the personal and organisational levels. Even at the workplace, the government must pass a strict law to open the gymnasium in all commercial buildings.
However
,
besides
 that, there must be monthly sessions regarding awareness of physical exercise occur. Individuals have to make lifestyle modifications in order to avoid
this
. To recapitulate, in spite of having a busy schedule and sedentary life, the alteration has been done by individuals and the government by introducing fitness centres and changing daily routines causing the decline of medical
issues
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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