Prevention is better than cure.researching and treating diseases is too costly . So it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree
How wonderful if we can spend life without sickness
?
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!
Eventhough
we are Correct your spelling
Even though
rich
and Add an article
a rich
the rich
well known
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well-known
person
, there is no value if we are suffering from illness. As searching of new Fix the agreement mistake
people
medication
and treating of
illness after occurring is not Change preposition
apply
budget friendly
. preventing diseases from happening is better Add a hyphen
budget-friendly
that
it is gained more popularity than in the past. I strongly agree with putting money on Correct word choice
because
healthy
lifestyle is more effective than treating sickness.
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a healthy
Firstly
, finding a new drug is a complicated and time consuming
process which Add a hyphen
time-consuming
need
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needs
lot
of funds as it Change the article
a lot
use
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uses
lot
of human resources and raw materials. Not only that after Change the article
a lot
discover
a new Change the form of the verb
discovering
medication
through lengthy
process,Add an article
a lengthy
the lengthy
it is
needed to Add the word(s)
but it is also
be test
on animal subjects. If Change the verb form
be tested
this
step is sucess
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success
then
drug
should Add an article
the drug
be test
on clinical groups. Change the verb form
be tested
Due to
above
reasons Correct article usage
the above
reasearching
for a new Correct your spelling
researching
medication
has been more difficult from the beginning.
Secondly
, Most people do not pay attention on
their health and follow unhealthy Change preposition
to
lifestyle
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lifestyles
such
as eating juncky
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junk
foods
and end up with some disorder which causes Fix the agreement mistake
food
lot
of Change the article
a lot
expences
and Care. A person who is suffering from sickness has to pay medical bills for doctors,laboratories and drugs Correct your spelling
expenses
while
enduring anoromus
pain. Because of that treating health conditions is not Correct your spelling
enormous
cost effective
.
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cost-effective
Finally
, there are lot
of benefits of prevention Correct article usage
a lot
medication
qs
it promotes Correct your spelling
as
long
lifespan and happiness in mankind. Correct article usage
a long
As well as
people can enjoy better
quality of life because they are free from Add an article
a better
sufferings
. Money which should be spent Fix the agreement mistake
suffering
for
treatments can be used for other purposes. Doing regular exercise, eating Change preposition
on
healthy
diet and living Add an article
a healthy
stress free
life are key factors of Add a hyphen
stress-free
healthy
lifestyle. We should check our clinical parameters Add an article
a healthy
time
to Change preposition
from time
time
and agest as accordingly
.
In conclusion,inventing new drugs and curing illness
are more Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
time consuming
and cause Add a hyphen
time-consuming
large
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a large
amount
of fortune. So it Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
better
to pay attention Add a missing verb
is better
on
preventing Change preposition
to
disease
from occurring and I strongly comply with Add an article
the disease
above
statement.Add an article
the above
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