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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.
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The map illustrates, the market's values and places for particular eatable and opinions to eat insect items all around the world.
Overall
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, 12
Countries
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 participated in the survey,
only
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and only
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few
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a few
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 nations are showing high
interset
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interest
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, In that Mexico has extreme
supporting
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support
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in
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for
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 eating
insect based
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insect-based
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 products. Rest of
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countries
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the countries
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having
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have
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 mixed ratios.
To begin
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 with,
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in
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Mexico, 71% were ready to have the aforementioned products,
while
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peru
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Peru
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 has
showing
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shown
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 58%.
Furthermore
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,
thailland
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Thailand
 is just behind the peru,
only
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with only
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2
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a 2
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per cent difference,
that is
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 56%. Brazil and china have
almost
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the almost
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same
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the same
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interest
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interests
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, Both have
1
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a 1
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% variance. Brazil has 45% and china has 44%. the fourth country is South Africa, showing 39%
interest
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. Europe
countries
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such
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 as Australia and UK have small
variation
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variations
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. Australia 36% and 36% Uk.
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 to
this
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, Spain and India have similar
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interest
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interests
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. The two
countries
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 have 33%.Remaining, Two
countries
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, Japan and Russia. Russia is
highly
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a highly
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 populated country, but only 32% showing
interest
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.
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 but not least, Japan only 21%
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, interest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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