The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.

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The map illustrates, the market's values and places for particular eatable and opinions to eat insect items all around the world.

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, 12

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participated in the survey,

only

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few

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nations are showing high

interset

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interest

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, In that Mexico has extreme

supporting

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eating

insect based

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products. Rest of

countries

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having

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mixed ratios.

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Mexico, 71% were ready to have the aforementioned products,

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peru

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58%.

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Thailand

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per cent difference,

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56%. Brazil and china have

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same

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interest

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interests

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% variance. Brazil has 45% and china has 44%. the fourth country is South Africa, showing 39%

interest

. Europe

countries

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as Australia and UK have small

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. Australia 36% and 36% Uk.

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, Spain and India have similar

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. The two

countries

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, Japan and Russia. Russia is

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populated country, but only 32% showing

interest

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but not least, Japan only 21%

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2Word repetition
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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why this is the case, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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schools are no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through the Inteenet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree