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In several parts of the world, humans live near the protected areas which preserve and safeguard the wildfire. What problems could this situation cause? What solutions you can suggest?

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On earth, few
areas
 are allocated and reserved for
the
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wild-
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wildlife
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life
.
While
 near
by
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to
this
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these
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areas
their
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there
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 having small villages where
peoples
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people
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 are living with very minimal facilities. That part of
location
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 is required protection and safety from
animals
 and insects to leave peacefully. Humans who are leaving in that
area
 have benefits too like to get a beautiful and clean environment and to have better air circulation.
About the
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 causes, I am explaining in the essay. The causes are they need to live with simple things like no developed
areas
 and businesses for sources of income.
While
 they do have a risk from
animals
 that
in
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night
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the night
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 or in
day
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 if any
animals
 will come out
then
 people will get
an
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attack
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 by
animals
 and species.
Therefore
, the
area
 is
rural
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a rural
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area
 so no
any
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hospitals are
in
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near by
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nearby
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 to save the
life
,
also
 no
any
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transportation
are
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 available to reach out
the
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 hospitals to save the
life
.
Second
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 important
things
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 is that
new
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 generation will not get proper education to improve their
life
 living things. In terms of a solution, the government should take the step to provide minimal facilities to live
life
 in the backward
area
 too.
Specially
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, which are near the
forest
area
. By providing the hospital to save their
life
 in case any emergency is
comeup
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come up
.
Second,
by allocating the
forest
 officer who can make boundaries near the village. So people can get safely and help too. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 can provide help with developing
hospital
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hospitals
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 and allocating
forest
specialist
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specialists
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 for
heling
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healing
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to
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people who are living
near by
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nearby
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 the
forest
areas
.
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