The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate how an academy site is planned to be developed over 20 years.

Overall

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, there will be extensive developments concerning the construction of

buildings

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, facilities and roads on the institution site.

Moreover

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, the student capacity will be increased significantly. In 2004, there was only one car park to the west of the site where the main entrance was located. There were

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two educational

buildings

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namely

school

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buildings

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1 and 2, accommodating 600 students, separated by the path connecting the main entrance and the

sports

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field to the east. The

school

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was surrounded by woodland in the north, south and east. There are plans to increase the number of students learning at the academy by 400 in 2024.

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, a new building called

school

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building 3 will be constructed to replace the previous

sports

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field, and the two original

school

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buildings

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are going to be joined together. The old path is going to be shortened connecting these and

school

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building 3.

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, a new car park and a new

sports

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field are planned to be built on a small sector of the woodland in the east.

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, the old road will be extensively paved passing south of

school

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building 2 which will connect two car parks.

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, with the old

sports

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ground being replaced by the late building, there will be some space for the woodland to grow to the north of the building.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words buildings, school, sports with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

239 words

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