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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.
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The assigned table chart illustrates the information and predictions about the change in the proportion of the
population
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 of the senior citizens above in three different nations Canada, Germany and the UK from 19880 to 2030
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, it is lucid that, in the future, the
Germany
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German
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 region would be the
higgest
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highest
biggest
 percentage of the
population
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 of elder people.
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, the UK had the lowest ratio of the
population
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 . At a fleeting glance, it is immensely clear that
,
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 the ratio of
age
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the age
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 65
population
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 in
canada
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Canada
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 would be increased
with
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by
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 26% in the 21st century.
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 in the same nation ranked
last
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merely
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 16% in the given period of time and in the
20st
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20th
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 century the portion was 21%.
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 , the top seat was notched by Germany percentage would be third - ten in the later year.
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 scrutinizing the chart, the
population
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 of grey hair people in the same nation was around similar with a fifth and a fourth in 1988 to 2000 respectively .
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, in the UK the
population
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 of senior citizens would be 20%in the given period of time. Whilst , the ratio was approximately
indentical
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identical
 with 14% and 15% from 1988 to 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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