Famous sportsmen often earn a lot more money than people in other professions. Although sport is important in our lives, everyone should be equal and such big incomes of sport professionals are unjustified. Do you agree or disagree

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advertisements and tv commercials using the sponsor’s products.

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is not the only reason why they receive a high income. On the one hand, athletes do intensive workouts

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. It is quite difficult to become a well-known sportsman as it requires a high level of dedication and physical practice. Sportsmen did not become famous overnight.

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, Usain Bolt, a Jamaican runner who was awarded three gold medals, had to practise running for 12 hours daily so he could become the world’s fastest runner and represent his country in the Olympics.

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professionals high salaries for enjoying their hobbies. A sports player is not more important than healthcare workers or firefighters, who risk their own lives to save ours from diseases and disasters. What is more, world champions do little in supporting notable causes or charities, which I think they must do more of. I agree to some extent that it is justifiable for sports professionals to receive high salaries for what they do

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since they entertain us with sports and most of them are role models for adolescents who want to stay active so they could one day become

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. In conclusion, paying

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professionals high salaries is good for the people and our country as a whole as they are role models for children.

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Famous sportsmen often earn a lot more money than people in other professions. Although sport is important in our lives, everyone should be equal and such big incomes of sport professionals are unjustified. Do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballer. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

International sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your position

In many countries, the age of criminals is getting lower. Give reasons and solutions to the problem. Support your position with relevant examples.