More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicine. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. What extent do you agree?

Nowadays,
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problems become
major
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a major
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issue
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issues
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due to
unhealthy
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the unhealthy
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lifestyle of society.
However
, some illnesses are not
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to modern medicines.
Therefore
, most of the patients assume that
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into
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ancient drugs can reduce it.
This
essay will discuss why the traditional treatment would be beneficial
although
, the present science is undeniable. In
this
era, science is the most developed technology. It is growing fast
as well as
It helps
patient
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patients
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to recover fast. Somehow, few negative effects will happen by using
this
. As an example, getting more
pain killers
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will damage the kidney. At the same time, our
grand parents
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are having good health
while
using past pillars. By the way, people have to spend less money on the cultural method rather than the future scientist follows. Especially, the ancient tablets include
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natural ingredients
as well as
the
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handmade process.
Furthermore
,
this
takes more
times
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to get recover. In general, the process of handmade has less secure.
Also
, most of the tablets
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been made by workers
due to
instructions. Somehow, the natural ingredients won’t be bad for
body
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the body
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, and it gives
energy
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to work as usual. At that time,
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difficult to find remedies. Most of the ancient doctors recommend having healthy food and
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exercises
as well as
avoiding
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busy lifestyle.
To conclude
, recent treatments will take more money and less time
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having another bad disease. But the grandparent’s method will help us to get natural things
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a drug. My recommendation is not to accept western life and keep
mind
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always to maintain a healthy diet
instead
of getting fast food.
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