More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicine. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. What extent do you agree?
Nowadays,
health related
problems become Add a hyphen
health-related
major
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a major
issue
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issues
due to
unhealthy
lifestyle of society. Correct article usage
the unhealthy
However
, some illnesses are not Add an article
a response
response
to modern medicines. Replace the word
respond
Therefore
, most of the patients assume that change
Wrong verb form
changing
into
ancient drugs can reduce it. Change preposition
to
This
essay will discuss why the traditional treatment would be beneficial although
, the present science is undeniable.
In this
era, science is the most developed technology. It is growing fast as well as
It helps patient
to recover fast. Somehow, few negative effects will happen by using Fix the agreement mistake
patients
this
. As an example, getting more pain killers
will damage the kidney. At the same time, our Correct your spelling
painkillers
grand parents
are having good health Correct your spelling
grandparents
while
using past pillars. By the way, people have to spend less money on the cultural method rather than the future scientist follows. Especially, the ancient tablets include the
natural ingredients Correct article usage
apply
as well as
the
handmade process. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, this
takes more times
to get recover.
In general, the process of handmade has less secure. Fix the agreement mistake
time
Also
, most of the tablets has
been made by workers Correct subject-verb agreement
have
due to
instructions. Somehow, the natural ingredients won’t be bad for body
, and it gives Add an article
the body
energy
to work as usual. At that time, Change the article
the energy
it’s
difficult to find remedies. Most of the ancient doctors recommend having healthy food and Wrong verb form
it was
the
exercises Correct article usage
apply
as well as
avoiding the
busy lifestyle.
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a
To conclude
, recent treatments will take more money and less time with
having another bad disease. But the grandparent’s method will help us to get natural things Change preposition
than
as
a drug. My recommendation is not to accept western life and keep Correct quantifier usage
such as
mind
always to maintain a healthy diet Change preposition
in mind
instead
of getting fast food.Submitted by uddeepa.eashani96 on
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