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Traffic congestion and air pollution are becoming problematic in most cities around the world. People must be encouraged to use their cars less and public transport more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Around the world, pollution in the atmosphere and heavy
traffic
 was considered some of the biggest problems faced by every country. I completely agree with others who claimed that people must be encouraged to walk more or utilise public
transportation
 more often.
Traffic
 congestion is very prevalent mostly in major cities of every country.
This
 was brought by the building of commercial and industrial businesses to only major areas of the town.
For instance
, the population will consider buying cars and decide to live in those cities
due to
 the availability of jobs and other opportunities. Because people need to move, they will put oil or petroleum in there and the burning of
this
 oil will increase carbon monoxide in the atmosphere,
thus
 polluting the air. To solve these problems, the public must increase their awareness and participation in decreasing
traffic
 and air pollutants. Examples of these ways are using public
transportation
 more by the public. To encourage them in utilising public
transportation
, they must install an air-cooling system and increase the number of trains and buses to give comfort to passengers. The government must establish other buildings and infrastructure in other nearby cities, not only in one major city. So that their citizens will not build up in one area only to buy certain commodities. In conclusion, there are several factors that contribute to
traffic
 and air problems but these can be avoided the public individuals will use more environmentally friendly modes of
transportation
 or use public
transportation
 more frequently.
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