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The risk comes from artificial intelligence because AI wants to destroy humans.

#risk #intelligence #humans
Nowadays, technology was improved
for
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 help human activities. Artificial intelligence or AI is one of
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innovation
 which can
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job
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effectively
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 than
human
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humans
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. In my opinion, AI
dosen't
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 want to destroy humans because they're just robots and
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emotional
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. By the way, using AI for
human's
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 activities has both advantages and disadvantages. First of all, AI has hight accurate in work and
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resources
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than human. Currently,
human
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were replace
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 by AI for some jobs
such
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a seller
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seller
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 or product inspectors. In the
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, AI may able to do complex works. Some people lost their jobs because AI can do their tasks and save
companies'
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cost
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.
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Moreover
, human get used to using AI for convenience. Since AI can learn by itself all the time, some people
use
 them to
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 work or create
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new thing. It
make
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 human
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less creative because AI
think
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instead
them
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.
However
, AI can
use
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