In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Some
people
consider having their own
house
is better than renting from landlords. I would say that
this
is a positive
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phenomenon
phenomena
, and I will discuss
about
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it in
this
essay. First of all, purchasing a
house
is an
invest
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for the future.
House
owners can sell their
house
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and earn profits
from
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by doing it.
For example
, my parents bought a small apartment in Seoul when they got married. After I was born, they wanted to move to
much
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bigger
house
.
Therefore
, they sold the
house
with extra profits, because near the apartment new facilities had been constructed,
such
as
metro
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station and
big
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shopping mall. With the money they got from selling it, they could move to
spacious
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house
for raising a child.
Moreover
,
people
get less stress if they buy a
house
rather than
renting
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one. Renting a place to live means that
people
has
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to move out after the contraction ends.
However
, when
people
have their own place, they don’t have to worry about
stressful
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process of moving and searching for new places, so getting a
house
makes
people
to
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get
stable
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mindset with stress-free life.
In addition
, buying a
house
allows
people
to get ownership, by decorating their own places. They can do whatever they want, like painting the walls, planting
graden
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garden
, even
make
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a personal cinema in their houses.
People
can decorate their
home
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with
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personal taste and adjust their rooms suitable for their lifestyles. In conclusion, purchasing a
house
has tons of benefits rather
than
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renting a place, in terms of
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life
as well as
financial profits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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