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Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Worldwide sports are a common activity. Now everyone like so much of outdoor activities
such
 as football , cricket and tennis.In the modern ,
world
 people gives their support for sports from everywhere.That's why many countries conduct together worldwide events like
World
Cup
, the Olympics and the commonwealth
games
. Some people think that international
games
 are good and some thought bad. In
this
 paragraph discuss it. When we conduct international
games
 it provides a lot of benefits to our country. ,First of ,all we know about the strengths and weaknesses of the
games
 and players
then
 we can develop ourselves. ,
Also
 we will be getting a lot of tourists to watch the
games
 .it's good for our economy. Some kinds of new methods of tricks we have been receiving from foreign players.For , in example
last
 10 years
India
 did not win the
World
Cup
 in cricket but
India
 conducts the 2011
World
Cup
 in
India
. In
this
World
Cup
India
 became the final list ,
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 it won the
cup
. From the second point of ,
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view we need to face the traffic jams and road diversion.In different ,countries people together watching the events bring more health illnesses like a new kind of fever and inspection. For ,example covid
also
 spread in crowded areas. These kinds of health problems we will get. In conclusion, a lot of benefits have
while
 conducting international
games
 in our country.
Then
 economics will be increasing.It's better for arriving investors to our nation . It is a chance to show our country's unity and power.
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