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There are many disadvantages and advantages to having only one child. Do the advatages outweigh the disadvantages?

There are benefits and drawbacks to having an only
child
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. There are numerous
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 to an only
child
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 , which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. As far as I am concerned the cons outweigh the pros. To talk about the
advantages
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 of having
one
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child
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 I can say
one
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-
child
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 families can have more attention to pay to their parents by way of example people who have
one
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 kid for a living can focus their mind, time and money on
one
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 person which will be more helpful to grow a
child
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.
On the other hand
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, the
child
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 can be full of joy and happiness. Neither the parents can be mad at themselves. When the
child
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 becomes an adult, he/she can be famous and really popular at her or his job. In
this
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 paragraph, we will talk about the
disadvantages
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 of having
one
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 kid.
To begin
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 with, when you grow as an only infant of a family somehow loneliness will always be in your heart like a hole inside you. As a single progeny causes you to get so much heed from guardians. Maybe you can be capricious and diligent to other people and
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 makes you slothful .
To sum up
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,
according to
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 what has already been discussed there are many
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 to being an only
child
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while
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 the
advantages
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 outweigh the
disadvantages
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.

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