The old tradition of a family having a meal together is disappearing. Why do you think is this happening? How does it affect individuals and the community?

the table illustrates
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information
on police sources of
income
and the way it was used in two years 2017 and 2018 in one
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area.
overall
, we can see that in both
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2017 and 2018 most of the money where spent on technology,
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whereas
the least of it
spent
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on building and transport.
moreover
, the total budget reached 304.7
m
in 2017 ,
while
in 2019 it reached 318.6
m
.
to begin
,
police
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budget reached 304.7 in 2017 where most of its
income
came from
national
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government ,and it was 175.5m .
additionally
, 91.2 came from local
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taxes
,and 38
m
from other sources. on other hand , in 2018 the
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police
finance reached 318.6
m
,
and
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it is higher than
2017
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because
income
from local taxes increased significantly to 102.3
m
,
whereas
income
from the government
incrased
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increased
only 2. 3
m
as the other sources ,which
also
rose to 0.5m only.
furthermore
,
how
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money was used ,we can see that most of it
used
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to develop the technology that police use in both years
although
salaries have increased from 8% in 2017 to 17% in 2018 ,
while
the buildings and
transprt
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transport
expences
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have
remain
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the same ,which are 17%.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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