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The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity?

#importance #biodiversity #numbers #species #threat
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Growing numbers of
species
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 under threat are the most crucial thing about
biodiversity
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. A safe
environment
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 and growing awareness of
people
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 about
species
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 are ways to maintain
biodiversity
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. In my opinion, a safe climate is the best idea to keep
biodiversity
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 on our earth. Earth has many environments like
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a forest
the forest
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forest
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forests
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,
sea
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seas
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,
river
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rivers
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, urban, etc. In the forest, society
need
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 to keep  plants from illegal logging and jungle fires,
furthermore
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species
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 have long ages in the park. In different areas of the sea, some
people
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 catch fish with explosive material. it can break all of the
biodiversity
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 in the sea. So,
public
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 should use
a safe ways
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a safe way
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 to catch fish in the ocean like fishing from a boat.
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, society in the bank river in the urban area
also
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 keeps their habitat by littering in the right place, because littering in the wrong place make flooding and broke the
environment
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 of
biodiversity
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 in the river.
People
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 should keep all of the
environment
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 of
biodiversity
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 on the earth, so the number of
species
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 under threat can increase significantly. The second way is growing awareness
of
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among
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people
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 to save
biodiversity
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.
People
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 should know knowledge and literature about
biodiversity
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. Government should give education on
biodiversity
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 in public
space
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spaces
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, schools, and universities.
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,
people
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 know important things about
biodiversity
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.
Biodiversity
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 in our world keeps
people
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 from global warming and many disasters. So,
people
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 care about their
environment
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 by littering in the right place and caring for all of the
species
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.
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, the best way to
maintaining
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maintain
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biodiversity
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 is
save
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to save
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 the
environment
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 and
grow
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 awareness among
people
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 about
biodiversity
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. So,
people
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 can save
species
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 under threat and their numbers increase significantly.
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