The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the procedure through which smoked
fish
are prepared. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the procedure can be divided into three main groups beginning with catching
fish
to freeze, followed by preparing them to smoke, and
lastly
smoking and storing them to sell. In the beginning, fishermen provide
fish
from the sea and carry them to the port by boat.
This
is followed by, putting the
fish
into a freezer, before thawing them in fresh water. Once
this
step is complete, thawed
fish
are cut using a knife, after which they are waited in salt water to make them yellow in colour. In the stage
after
this
, the
fish
are smoked through the use of a barbecue,
following
this
, the smoked
fish
are packed and for
this
step, square-shaped boxes are used.
After
this
, the packed smoked
fish
are frozen at the temperature of 0 degrees and they are stored in a cold store. Over the course of the next step, the
fish
are loaded in a truck to distribute to
fish
shops and ultimately, they are ready to sell.
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