The number of people who are overweight is constantly growing, and the only solution is to increase the prices on unhealthy food and drinks. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, the number of overweight individuals has been increasing continuously. Enhancing the values of detrimental

foods

and beverages is the sole solution to ratify the situation. I mostly disagree with

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suggestion because there are many ways to overcome

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case

such

as encouraging

exercise

and spurring healthy and

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foods

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society.

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, most

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people

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run their lives without necessary

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public. Lack of enough body practice leads to

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kilos

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and health issues.

People

should be encouraged to do some practice regularly by some programmes and regulations.

For instance

, governments can create digital applications on mobile phones which reward some tickets and discounts

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public areas.

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could be encouraging for

people

’s

exercise

.

Thus

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people

would become more active

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outside and they may avoid

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weight.

Secondly

,

people

often eat unhealthy

foods

and they consume them as redundant. These

foods

give negative effects on the circulation system and they are not

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individuals’ hunger.

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can be spurred to consume healthy

foods

with some mass education programmes.

For example

, television and radio channels can arrange informative programmes with the support of governments.

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classes could be opened in public facilities in order to teach the appropriate nutrition for

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.

Besides

, governments can remove some taxes from healthy groceries and products in terms of better reaching

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the public.

Therefore

,

people

’s nutrition habits may be changed and their tolerance can be reduced to gain kilos. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with

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suggestion. Even though

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increasing the values of unhealthy food products may be efficient, I believe

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is not the only way to halt

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case and there are different ways to cease

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situation

such

as spurring

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people

to

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exercise

and consume less

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healthy

foods

.