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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving older railway lines.

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There are opinions where
people
 support their country constructing new railways to travel between cities using a large amount of money. Meanwhile, the rest believe that improving the current public
transportation
 is a preferred way to spend
the
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money. In my opinion, I’m leaning towards the latter where improvements are the way to go.
Firstly
, a new construction possibly impacts the mobility of the
people
 because it is assumed that the construction will take years to be completed.
In addition
 to that, the usage of personal
transportation
 may be increased and affect the environment.
Also
,
this
 costly new railway can impact the travelling cost in order to cover the building and maintenance costs. Because of that, travelling becomes less affordable than it used to be.
On the other hand
, the existing public
transportation
 can be improved and it will have positive impacts on living quality
such
 as adaptation, air, and economic quality. If the action taken is an
improvement
, the foundation has existed.
This
 will require less adaptation for
people
 who are used to commuting and travelling using public
transportation
. Since
this
 is an
improvement
, it can be done in phases without majorly affecting the existing
transportation
 modes.
People
 can still use the current public
transportation
.
Also
, the phases of
improvement
 will make the cashout flow more well-managed, not spending a big amount at one time.
To conclude
,
while
 there are
people
 who agreed that spending a large amount of money on new railways is a necessity, I believe that improving existing public transport is better for life quality. The
improvement
 of current public transport requires less adaptation
,
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 and can be done in phases to avoid impulsive spending and decrease the number of
people
 who use public
transportation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Modernization
  • Efficiency
  • Congestion
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Preservation
  • Incremental improvement
  • Reliability
  • State-of-the-art
  • Futuristic design
  • Rural connectivity
  • Maintenance
  • Legacy systems
  • Strategic investment
  • Feasibility study
  • Public opinion
  • Eco-friendly
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Accessibility
  • Innovation
  • Heritage
  • Urbanization
  • Public-private partnership
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